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I’ve revised the poem I posted yesterday. I think this version better captures the heart of it. Let me know what you think.
Field Notes From Within
Our heart is a staunch defender of all
we are, beating with relentless passion
the wherewithal of our being.
Our bowels are alchemists skilled in
diplomacy, sifting silver from dross
passing peacefully away.
Our cells are seeds of pomegranates,
deftly designed for simple pleasures,
lushly dense and sweetly sated.
Our atoms are ballerinas, twirling
on ecstatic toes, arms flung wide,
faces like suns, dervishes of devotion.
Our body is like a tree full of leaves,
bark, sap, lichen—tiny worlds, seemingly
separate. Yet called to serve one
great and common purpose—I Am
–by Deborah J. Brasket (2021 – revised)
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Writing to Freedom said:
What a beautiful and descriptive poem. 😍
Thanks, Brad. I really appreciate that.
Thank you for that! I’m glad you think so.
Thanks Deborah, the poem is very nice. I also posted it in my blog. Really enjoy it.
I’m glad you liked it, and thanks so much for the reblog.